Jump to content


Photo

[Voting] Poetry Contest #22


  • This topic is locked This topic is locked
8 replies to this topic

Poll: Poetry Contest #22 (9 member(s) have cast votes)

Which is the best?

  1. mantisstalker - [Untitled] (0 votes [0.00%])

    Percentage of vote: 0.00%

  2. YoWid - [Untitled] (1 votes [11.11%] - View)

    Percentage of vote: 11.11%

  3. Red Opus - The Raven, the Crow and the Owl (3 votes [33.33%] - View)

    Percentage of vote: 33.33%

  4. Thread - The Last Light (0 votes [0.00%])

    Percentage of vote: 0.00%

  5. Sloan - [Untitled] (1 votes [11.11%] - View)

    Percentage of vote: 11.11%

  6. kessie - An Anonymous World (0 votes [0.00%])

    Percentage of vote: 0.00%

  7. Nmaan - Urban King (0 votes [0.00%])

    Percentage of vote: 0.00%

  8. Oben - Pipes (1 votes [11.11%] - View)

    Percentage of vote: 11.11%

  9. Strawhats - Jack the Ripper (1 votes [11.11%] - View)

    Percentage of vote: 11.11%

  10. hubris - Cities from Space (2 votes [22.22%] - View)

    Percentage of vote: 22.22%

Vote

#1 Oben

Oben

    3 Minutes after Boiling

  • Blessed by Uglypuff
  • PipPipPipPipPip
  • 11,027 posts

User's Awards

         2   

Posted 06 February 2015 - 05:02 PM

Welcome to the Voting for Poetry Contest #22!
The theme was "Urban".
 
The poll should be self-explanatory. Please vote objectively, and fair.
You are not allowed to vote for yourself.
 
Please also post your opinions/criticism in the thread.
Previous rounds and winners are found here.

Here are the various entries for this round:
 
 


Spoiler

 
 

Spoiler

 
 

Spoiler The Raven, the Crow and the Owl

 
 

Spoiler The Last Light

 
 

Spoiler

 
 

Spoiler An Anonymous World

 
 

Spoiler Urban King

 
 

Spoiler Pipes

 
 

Spoiler Jack The Ripper

 
 

Spoiler Cities from Space


Voting ends one week from now, on the 13th of February.

Edited by Oben, 10 February 2015 - 11:12 AM.


#2 Red Opus

Red Opus

    Ghost

  • Blessed by Uglypuff
  • PipPipPipPipPip
  • 2,067 posts

User's Awards

5    3   

Posted 07 February 2015 - 12:09 AM

Gotta give my boy Sloan props I have fun saying his over and over in different voices
  • Sloan likes this

9T9UA2g.jpg

 


#3 KLGChaos

KLGChaos

    Samurai

  • Members
  • PipPipPipPipPip
  • 1,398 posts
  • LocationPurgatory

User's Awards

2   

Posted 07 February 2015 - 03:54 AM

Lots of great entries again... went with hubris. I think his poem spoke to me the most, but it was a difficult choice!


fallout3_dogmeat_zpsjyrxypvn.jpg?t=14248

"You can run from all the memories, but no matter how far... in the end they'll find you, for this is who you are."


#4 azer_moli

azer_moli

    Member

  • Moderators
  • 3,005 posts
  • LocationFrance

User's Awards

2         

Posted 07 February 2015 - 06:14 PM

Some entries are really, really excellent. 

 

You're good, guys, thank you for those great poems :D


50c34dd1-274c-4550-9d6d-d6edce927b63_zps


#5 hubris

hubris

    Pirate

  • Members
  • PipPipPipPipPip
  • 424 posts

Posted 08 February 2015 - 12:30 AM

I'll post some more detailed critiques on the other entries later...

I'm going with Jack the Ripper. Thought it was a compelling take on the theme, and well executed in terms of aesthetics and clearly conveying meaning. 

I thought the first stanza was weak, but the second stanza made up for that. Personally I would have discarded the first stanza altogether. The second stanza would be a strong poem alone. If it was my poem, I'd cut the last 2 lines off the first stanza, and paste them right after "holy crusade".


Edited by hubris, 08 February 2015 - 03:21 AM.

  • Strawhats likes this

signature under construction


#6 Strawhats

Strawhats

    Nakama Gatherer <3

  • Blessed by Uglypuff
  • PipPipPipPipPip
  • 1,613 posts
  • LocationEngland

User's Awards

3   

Posted 09 February 2015 - 10:12 AM

I'll post some more detailed critiques on the other entries later...
I'm going with Jack the Ripper. Thought it was a compelling take on the theme, and well executed in terms of aesthetics and clearly conveying meaning.
I thought the first stanza was weak, but the second stanza made up for that. Personally I would have discarded the first stanza altogether. The second stanza would be a strong poem alone. If it was my poem, I'd cut the last 2 lines off the first stanza, and paste them right after "holy crusade".


Thank you for taking the time to evaluate my poem, it means a lot and will help me improve. I wrote the first two lines before I had a subject in mind and by the time the subject came to mind I decided to stick with it, I do agree that the last two lines would probably be better further down.

Edited by Strawhats, 09 February 2015 - 10:17 AM.

  • hubris likes this

53815365.gif


#7 hubris

hubris

    Pirate

  • Members
  • PipPipPipPipPip
  • 424 posts

Posted 09 February 2015 - 09:56 PM

glad to be of some help :) tho, of course, take it with a grain of salt, it is just my reading/ opinion. 

Also, forgot to go into detail in my last comment about what "aesthetics" I specifically liked about your poem...

 

The rhyme scheme (aabbcc), coupled with the metre, gave the poem the 'singsong' feel of a nursery rhyme. That light tone (created by the rhyme/ metre) juxtaposed really nicely with the gruesome language and narrative. All that, plus the use of first person ("my blade"/ "my wars"), gave me the impression of jack gleefully singing as flees the scene of one of his gruesome murders. Really cool effect, I'll be experimenting with first person next contest for sure.


  • Strawhats likes this

signature under construction


#8 Oben

Oben

    3 Minutes after Boiling

  • Blessed by Uglypuff
  • PipPipPipPipPip
  • 11,027 posts

User's Awards

         2   

Posted 14 February 2015 - 06:03 AM

Voting is over!

 

Red Opus, formerly Terminal Cough if I'm not mistaken, wins round #22!

The next round will be up once he picks a theme.



#9 Red Opus

Red Opus

    Ghost

  • Blessed by Uglypuff
  • PipPipPipPipPip
  • 2,067 posts

User's Awards

5    3   

Posted 14 February 2015 - 09:05 PM

Freestyle!
  • Sloan likes this

9T9UA2g.jpg

 





0 user(s) are reading this topic

0 members, 0 guests, 0 anonymous users