Well if it helps. Here's some things I noticed. Main protagonists and the antagonists are far too polarized in design. Antagonists are overly exagerrated with this Percy looking design while your protagonists look more of a typical characters. This isn't good because soon it becomes obvious who are the good guys vs bad guys. It also makes your series look even more black and white and overly simplified.
Additionally, in certain areas you decided to add some negative space to resemble shine. Because of that, your characters look like they are wearing rubber rather than clothes.
As for the story itself, it's rushed and you switch between scenes too quickly. There are reasons why manga show small panels of background, it's to help transition between one scene from the next.
It feels like the series is missing pages.
Thanks for the feedback, i'll be sure to remember that when making the pages
also there are at least 2 mangas out there named karasu. You should probably rename your manga to something more identifiable.
I will, for now i'll be calling it karasu rework
"also there are at least 2 mangas out there named karasu. You should probably rename your manga to something more identifiable."
isn't karasu (鴉) the japanese for "crow"? maybe adding some adjective could do the trick,
i mean why "crow"? are they just normal crows or there is something unusual about those?
I mixed up the words it was supposed to be kuro(black) instead of karasu(crow), nothing really speacial since i can't think of a title, so i just named it karasu(name of the mc)
the reworked version looks nice,
the drawing seems simpler (the first version looked really good, but too many details were distracting),
and the gray-black style looks familiar (also that monster reminds of eren titan, maybe it's just the hair)
Thank you, since i took a long break, i wanted to start easy and clean, that's probably why it looks simpler
hat i'm finding a bit off is the colored pages, it was likely on purpose to have a dark background, cause the scene is happening into a dark place, but that dark green background makes it hard to see the characters (expecially the monster who is also black)
compared to the black-white pages, the colored pages lack the white borders surrounding the characters, maybe it's just that
i'll probably change that in the final version to make it more clear, thanks for the feed back.