I'll first comment on other's poems:The Choke Artist by Red Opus
I like how your poem represents the heated moment of a basketball game's final deciding moments in a poem. In an actual game this happens so fast, but through a poem, I can see everything in slow motion. I'm not so familiar with basketball terms, so I'm sure I didn't appreciate it fully. But the ending was a surprised, based on the first few stanzas I was pretty sure he is going to get the ball in. Unititled by GintaMan
The feels in this one is strong, that's why I voted for it
. From what I understand, it is about a poem of a guy who really loves a girl, but for some reason, feels he isn't good enough and is deciding whether to pursue it or not. Or it could be a scenario where a guy wants to confess his love or just forget his feelings. Either way, I think the feels come from how I can sense the guy really loves the girl and yet he doesn't see it. Makes me want to root for him Endless Examples by Mantis Stalker
I agree with Red Opus that this is one dark poem. I like how you presented 2 scenarios, and I can relate more to the robot scenario more so I'll talk more about that. I think it speaks of the hidden fear in all of us, the fear of being useless. That no matter how much we work, or how much we achieve, in the end we are nothing. We are going to turn into dust and somebody better will inevitably replace us, which begs the question why are we even doing our best. Yeah, that's how I interpret it.
And I like your title of endless examples, it's as if you are saying there are more dreary scenarios happening as I type, that we just don't take a good look at it. And from what I understand, it's not really an indecision, but more of there's nothing to decide because inevitably it's going to be a dark road... Epitome of Creation by Diezdragon
Haha, I thought it was a serious poem..but turned out to be really funny xD. Yeah writing a poem is so difficult, but you turned that struggle into a poem which is really cool. And it now made sense why you entered your poem almost the last day haha.
As for my poem since Red Opus wants me to explain:
Edited by whatamelon, 17 September 2016 - 09:55 PM.