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[Grimmjagger]

Welcome to the voting for Poetry Contest #2!

The theme was "Vicious", as picked by the winner from the previous contest.

The poll should-be self-explanatory. Please vote objectively, and fair.
You are not allowed to vote for yourself.

Please also post your opinions/criticism in the thread.
Previous rounds and winners can be found pinned in the Contest Forum and the Discussion Thread.

Here are the entries for this round:

Spoiler Perfect, but only PART

It is all just gravy, now

having bled my dreams down an infinite well,
hoping desperately to become something less full
of myself

Could life really be so cruel?

having fought any hope of time,
may i yet have peace?
in broken, crying bits

Into yawning demons, wake

having written everywhen away
i have only tears to give,
to purchase future’s years

Please let my pain cool

having slain what calm feels like,
as though i feel your body, rather
than anxiety even i cannot climb

Let me find another way

having taught myself to break each day,
again,
tell me i am not yet too old

Even having said so,

this world is vicious to boys like me.

Spoiler Used abused unrecycled

Through the night, contemplating the meaning of sane,
Resurface memories of the errors that caused this pain.
Curled into a ball, secluded due to fear.
Sleep won't come, peace is far from near.
Into the darkness arrive feelings of shame,
That eyelids shut out but they still came.
A torn heart from the truth withers away,
Ignorance might be the one to blame.
Red boiling anger bubbles over the sadness,
Hatred for human kind is born from the madness.
Can it get more dark, inhuman, inhumane?
Nevertheless, this soul resides in the void just the same.

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@evilcheeser

Spoiler

This poem is interesting, what I liked about this poem is having to contemplate what the speaker is trying to imply. They have lost hope and cannot find peace or overcome their anxiety and pain. Hurting themselves/breaking everyday. The speaker wants to find hope, but the world is vicious to ‘boys’ like him and wants reassurance that they are ‘not too old.’ Which is quite depressing, but it shows how the world has been to the speaker, and in my opinion, you are never too old for anything, but sometimes the world will tell you other wise. “Your biological clock is ticking.” “At your age...” etc. Feelings of hopelessness are only that; feeling. There is always hope. Thanks for sharing your poem. I really like how your formatted it, as well. (did you mean everyone? Line 10)

@casscat

Spoiler

This poem (to me) shows what happens to someone when they have been abused, in that regard it is a great poem showing the viciousness of abuse, and these are the thoughts that came to my head after reading it. Thanks for sharing your poem. The only thing I did not like about your poem was the line “contemplating the meaning of sane.” Other than that, I liked it a lot.

Abuse is a heavy topic, but one that should be talked about more. Victims often blame themselves for the abuse they suffered in. It happens fast, and you are drowning in pain, fear, shame because of something that happened to you: abuse.

You question yourself, how could I have let this happen to me? You question others, how could anyone not have noticed? Perhaps you were young, and you question how could I have been so stupid?

All these questions are irrelevant, it is not yours or anyone else’s fault, but the abusers. Abuse in any form is wrong, leaving physical and emotional scars. Where the victim feels helpless, hopeless; useless.  

 

Thanks for sharing your poems, I had a really hard time deciding on who to vote for, both of your poems were great.

 

[Grimmjagger]

I will probably extend it to next week.

[Grimmjagger]

Closed. Winner: @evilcheeser Please choose the next theme via PM.